This is you right? I saw 'Pool' (and the delicious gif) and assumed that was right. Bookmarked!
I completely empathize with having zero confidence in ones writing but I've learned the only way to get better is to keep writing. I felt the same way years ago when I first got into fandom. I actually did the exact same thing with my fic after my first negative comment! I've learned there's also going to be some nitpicking loser with something awful to say, but that's what the comment delete button is for.
Your writing is fine. You have some really great ideas I'd love to see actualized, and you actually had a good grasp of the characters. Particularly Hannibal and how he developed into a passable alpha through hormone and surgery (nice touch with the reconstruction surgery to get rid of his 'softer' omega characteristics as well having him inject hormornes into his pelvis), using the gardens many scents to mask his own ass he comes down from a hormone high, Hannibal deciding he might just keep Will anyway and already having planned out a conservatory room for him.
The pack starting to question Will because he's an angry, hormonal, untested alpha. Him scenting Hannibal with out knowing it was Hannibal and instantly recognizing him as perfect. Even the heart breaking end to the first chapter when Will was desperately begging the apparition of the 'perfect omega' to please look at him. You were doing a fantastic job. I could tell you put a ton of thought into it. And a ton of other stuff that I don't want to overwhelm you with. Lol
Note: sorry to gush on you like this. I'm an english lit major who reads too deeply and enthusiastically into everything. Especially when it's a promising bottom/omega Hannibal fic. We need as many lovelies as we can get!
I'm really looking forward to anything you've got to give me. Can't wait! Happy writing! Xxx
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