I can’t stand the waitttt, this is already so good! I lowkey wish I hadn’t found this yet, because it just got started! It has good grammar/spelling, amazing characterization, and really pulls the reader in. I just want to keep reading, I was so ready to continue to the next chapter... I guess that just proves that this is such a good start ;) I feel like I’ve found a hidden gem, I can already tell this is going to be a wild ride. Only one thing that bothered me, if you don’t mind me pointing it out:
“SICK FAIRY POOFS!???” SCREECHED CLYTEMNESTRA. “I’LL HAVE YOU KNOW YOU ARE SPEAKING TO THE GREAT ILLUSTRIOUS HOUSE OF BLA-“
You capitalized ‘screeched Clytemnestra’. Just thought I’d point that out to help you a bit with this lovely story. Please keep updating! :)
Thank you so much for the input! And thanks for pointing that out that capitalization to me 😅 I hope you keep reading and I'm so glad you enjoyed this!! Seriously made my day!!
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