(Ashley please make some friends I beg you. Don't push Tali away she's like the easiest one to befriend please)
The behind-the-scenes politics in this chapter were great, I would have paid to see more of this in the games themselves!
We could have run around the galaxy promising more power on the galactic scene to all the species the council tries to keep down in order to get them to fight with us against the reapers. Tho I guess that with Shepard being a soldier before anything else and a lot of the game being about shooting I can see why we don't see much of the political side of things. Wouldn't it have been cool to play some mastermind politician that has to get everyone on the same front against the reapers in the ME universe, tho?
You got me on the edge of my seat for that final cliffhanger. I want to see that meeting so badly! Is it gonna be from the council's POV or the Spectre (or Specter in this universe, my bad) wonder duo's? I also want to see very badly who this mystery character is, it's always great seeing other characters added to the mix.
A renegade counter council would have been a cool approach for ME 2 and 3 for getting allies and support. Get the vorcha and batarians, maybe even the really big guys that had their mass relay sealed for being hostile, to side up with humans? That could be interesting~
This is gonna sound bonkers, but that mysterious character I’m adding is Nihlus. The chapter, with all three parts, was complete without him participating in the upcoming meeting. When he calls the Council, he was going to request for Shepard to have a private audience without him present. I kept going back and forth on whether he should be there or not, and if his presence would hurt Shepard more than help him. When I went to upload the chapter I backed out at the last second. It just doesn’t feel right for him to be absent. I’ve been rewriting part 2 over and over again, which is a chunk of conversation that happens between Nihlus and Shepard before the upcoming meeting.
I thought I found a good solution for part 2, but reading the comments here has given me a new perspective on the scene. Part 2 was constructed to separate the two characters, which means the scene no longer serves a purpose for the story. I also don’t like how it portrays all the characters I shoved into the scene (there’s nine that show up in total and six of them have dialogue). So I’m gonna cut it and go straight to part 3~
At last, I am free from my own nonsense! >:D
As for part 3, it was written from Shep’s perspective, but he literally has no internal monologue to justify it so I’m changing that as well.
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RockElen_Elly on Chapter 21 Tue 16 Jun 2020 02:03AM UTC
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