Olympus was silent. It was an odd state for the mountain to be in, Dionysius’s parties, Apollo’s singing, The sound of Hermes’s wings flittering as he zipped about delivering messages- there was always noise on Olympus. The gods were a naturally obstreperous lot, petty squabbles were constant and they had almost daily banquets—even their very presence was loud, or at least oppressive.//// I like this narration, good detail
No one wanted to have to face the empty seat that would await them./// *flails in feels*
Zeus himself hadn’t left his palace since the tournament ended. Since he had screamed at Apollo to—do something, you stupid imp! Isn’t this your domain?!—since he had ordered Ares and Hermes to carry her to the infirmary, insistent that Apollo would find something to aid her soon—Zeus hadn’t left since he had killed her.//// *flailing in feels*
Well, almost no one.//// Hera is so done, and it's so great bc someone gotta put him in his place
Centuries ago, she had demanded he build her her own bedroom, upset over a particularly recent affair of his. She was even more glad for it now. She didn’t think she could sleep next to him ever again after what he did./// love this
She was never close to her step-kids—honestly “never close” was generous, she was outright hostile—but she wouldn’t allow him to insult Apollo for being unable to heal the unhealable. Not after he tortured the poor boy with the remains of his sister, forcing him to walk past her body everyday and be subject to its worsening condition./// we love the compassion breaking through
Zeus sat up from his bed. “I dare you to say that again Hera. I dare you. She will be fine once she ceases her theatrics.”/// so well written
“You know what? I’m not doing this with you anymore. I’m going to order that her body be buried. She doesn’t deserve to have her memory desecrated like this.” Hera turned to storm out as she finished speaking. Both from anger and desperation to leave before things could go south./// so in character and i love it
Zeus straighten up, face twisted in panic as he called out to her before she could leave. “Wait, Hera, please. Just- just give me one more day, ok? I’ll fix it I promise. I’ll figured something out.” He begged./// awww love this idk what else to say this is like English class all over again. "Why do you like it?" . . . . "well *has a bajillion unformed thoguhts * . . because it's good
The man chained to the rock flinched violently at the sight of him, eyes wide and unrecognizing. Zeus transformed in a shower of light, he had expected the man to calm down once he realized Zeus wasn’t an actual eagle, but if anything the man only seemed more frightened once he shifted./// lol so real. Also this is random but it's crazy that he eats the liver of all organs bc the human liver is regenerative you can remove around 70-80% of it and it will grow back. But like there is n
Zeus hummed pridefully, he really was excellent at his job, /// bruh the mental gymnastics Prometheus would have been stuck here till
Prometheus sat on the boulder for a second stunned, before he scrambled to his feet to kneel before the God King. “Thank you for your mercy, my King. I can assure you I will never defy you again-“
“Save your groveling for later, Prometheus. I have a job for you.” Zeus still held his lightning out of its container. He doubted Prometheus would refuse his order, but it didn’t hurt to have extra persuasion at the ready. “Recently, one of my daughters has passed. I would like you to craft her a new body. Since you have experience with making the humans already, I expect your second try at making intelligent life will be much less flawed.” Zeus tightened his grip on his weapon at that, a subtle but effective threat.
Prometheus stood wide eyed as he processed what the Zeus had said. “Which one of your children died?” He asked before he could think better of it.
Zeus glared for second before growling out the answer. “Athena.” He ignored the look of shock that washed over Prometheus and turned to leave the cliff. /// prometheus wait till you find out hwo she died buddy
He pushed open the door to a quaint black palace. He strode through the halls like he owned them, because really he did, there was little he didn’t own as the God King./// bruhhh this is great tho so Zeus
Hades sighed. “I was wondering when you’d come around to ask after her. Do you know how much chaos her presence has caused down here? Gods aren’t bound to the same rules of morality as humans, how am I even meant to judge her? Where do I place her? She can’t be kept in the same afterlife as the mortals.”/// bruh your neice is dead and that's what you care about!!! like your supposed to be the nice one!!! Then again you did kidnap your neice.
“I am going to bring her back. She has no right to avoid her punishment like this. It’s cowardly.” Zeus forced his face to remain neutral as he spoke. He didn’t know why he was still so upset at her, but he knew he was. Why else did he feel so horrible every time he thought about her lifeless body laying crumpled at his feet? //// because you feel bad you killed her and maybe because she's your daughter and despite all your abuse you still love her
Not like it mattered though, since Zeus didn’t plan on aiding him either way./// lmao
Ares kneeled before Zeus as Hermes fluttered into the throne room behind him. “Yes, father?” Ares spat the word father out like it was an insult. He was one of the few who were more angry then fearful after what took place in the arena./// and we love him for that!!! Loyal angry puppy dog!!!
Hermes bowed next to his brother, he had never been one to kneel, touching the ground seemed antithetical to his very being. “At your service, father!” The upbeat tone his voice always held was badly strained./// my poor baby
If nothing else, at least this whole fiasco had taught them all to follow his orders without question. That was good. Why did it hurt so much to see the pain and distrust in their eyes? Like they worried every time he called on them, they could be next?/// no emotional common sense even, we love it so interesting
Apollo jumped as Zeus opened the door to his infirmary. He turned to bow the moment he recognized who it was that had chosen to invade his sanctuary. “Father, what can I do for you?” Apollos voice was horse and his eyes were puffy from crying. The curtain to Athena’s bed was only party drawn. He had likely been crying over her, he spent a good bit of his free time doing that now.
“Nothing, child./// does he feel bad about how he's been crying over his sister's body
Zeus wanted to claw his eyes out. She didn’t deserve this./// suffer, bitch!!!
darting off to go and find Hera /// as one does or some other God to try and talk some sense into the king.
My daughter is far from forgettable.” /// love this *flails in feels*
“You’re right, God king. My apologies.” Prometheus stuttered out as he dropped to the floor beside her body, summoning clay to start working.
Zeus left the titan to his work, intentionally neglecting to dismiss Ares or Hermes so that there would be someone present to supervise the fire God and his brother. He decided would return in an hour or so, that was more then enough time for Prometheus to have finished his sculpt and for his brother to have tied Athena’s soul to it.
When he came back, he heard the sounds of hushed arguing, he cleared his throat and made the men in the room snap to attention. He approached the thing they were crowding around and nearly murdered the titan on the spot.
On the ground, curled in her own wings was Athena. /// awww my poor baby!!! Or, well, it resembled Athena. The child wasn’t even a full fledgling yet, it’s wings were spotted with bits of downy/// awww
and were pathetically oversized// i think you mean adorably, Zeus!
It couldn’t have been older then six or seven,// watch her be like 4 or 5
Zeus grabbed Prometheus by the collar of his chiton and pulled out his thunderbolt. “Is this some sort of joke, titan? I entrust you with aiding my daughter and you mock her?”
Prometheus shivered in his hold and violently shook his head. “No! This is the best I- We could do, Zeus! I can’t bring her back to full strength, this is the oldest I could make her while still preserving her immortality!”
Hades intrupted Zeus’s response. “He’s right you know brother. Unless you want her to become mortal and simply die in a couple years anyway, then this-“ Hades gestured to his regressed niece. “-is all we could do.”
Zeus dropped Prometheus and walked over to his brother, still fuming. “Is that so?”
“It is. She will likely grow back up, brother. This is the best option we have.” Hades spoke calmly. He wasn’t particularly concerned about Zeus killing him. After all, his job was invaluable, and no one else wanted to do it.
This wasn’t fair, Athena was supposed to be fine now, but she hardly even looked like herself/// there's a hint of care in this and i like it
He sheathed his bolt and turned to pick up his daughter. He would have Apollo look her over and ensure her new form wasn’t any more damaged then it already was. Then he would whip that useless titan till his spine broke.
Anyway it's really really really REALLY GOOD!! I'm rereading it and I thought i'd leave some nice thorough comments. If you don't like that commenting style just let me know <3
HOLY CRAP! This is THE longest comment I've gotten!! Dw, I love comments like these! I'll try to type up a proper reply later when I have the time (I have a lot of coursework to deal with sadly) but I just had to reply to tell you I adore this :)
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