I honestly really like this,and the idea seems well thought out. The only thing is that it kinda jumps from thoughts really fast, so it's hard to process what's going on. I also think that maybe you can add more uhh.. descriptions to the story? like, elaborate more on thoughts of Noah and Cody when it's their perspective to give it more flow. that's really all that I realized makes it sound awkward in some places so if you just fix it up and add more pacing it would be good.<33(i'm still gonna read it no matter what. NOCO WORLD DOMINATION!!
Thank you so much!! I appreciate you telling me this, I struggle with pacing so much you don't understand 😭 I'm writing this fic to hopefully improve my writing skills, so I'm really glad you're giving me feedback. Do you have any examples of where I could expand the thoughts more? Thank you so much!! 🩷🩷
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