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  1. mordredsimp on Chapter 1 Fri 12 Jul 2019 08:04PM UTC

    I like this idea, the dialogue is a little rough, maybe use " instead of - ( sorry, I'm on mobile), it's difficult to know when one conversation ends and another begins. Overall not a bad first chapter

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    1. Somna on Chapter 1 Fri 12 Jul 2019 09:40PM UTC

      I guess you're right, now after reading it again, I see what you mean. The funny thing is that everytime I'm writting something ( without publishing it) I'm using ". Don't really know why I used - here. Thanks for comment :)

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