I’ve read this for a long time tho I haven’t finished all of ‘em yet. I prepare to leave a long enough comment from the start so here it is. I’d appreciate it if u can finish reading such a wordy comment lolll! And I think when I finish it all I will write another comment. <3
I’ve downloaded the whole 76 chaps on my phone. While reading it I take down many notes (That’s a reading habit of mine I just can’t help with it 😆) … I love the way you organize your sentence structure and the words you choose to use, so well written and I even read them to feel the rhythm of your language, like an epic! Some of your sentences I can even recite completely since I’ve read them in my notes for many times. Especially parts ab sceneries (I rly love the way you depict different planets), little expressions (*Obi smiling*) as well as deeper thoughts of characters… I just can’t find appropriate words to praise your work. Your words are all too pictorial and give me much feelings so I can totally dive into this world every night I read this. ;)
Except for beautiful sentences I will also write down my opinions and feelings all down to my notes, most of which are “ahhhhhhh/wowwwwww/LMAO they r soooo cuteeee/Obiiiiiiiiiiiiomggggg” LOL. It’s rly amazing that my mood just changes as the plot goes. And I love this journey sooo much. <333
For the plot and character design, I love y/n and appreciate how much efforts you put into this just to make us feel more like “I am her/him”, even ab [l/c] wwwww, and u did it so well it rly feels like it is MY OWN STORY in Star Wars. And I love all those details, uneasy feeling to settle in a new world, hard training to become a Jedi and gradually establish closer relationship with Obi through one mission after another… Your missions design are also cool enough to arouse my interest every time! I feel like I rly sing a song to those kidnapped children, having those sweet moments with him and together exploring the whole galaxy through every adventure… It’s just sooo nice OMG.
I rly love the way you write Obi, his words and reaction are just… so HIM. I feel reassured. And I love relationships between characters… even including the one between Windu and y/n and with Master Jinn. Through your writing I gradually establish trust and love with every one of them and it’s actually a bit hard to achieve if we rly live in that world as a lost child but you just did that for us! Obi’s comfort, QuiGon’s encouragement and even Windu’s careness… all feel so real.
Actually I was ab to leave the comment after finishing them all but I can’t wait lol since I’m gonna meet Anakin AND I GOT PRETTY EXCITED RIGHT NOW!
Thx a lot for creating this lovely story 😭😭😭🥹🥹🥹🥰🥰🥰 for this just brings me so much joy and happiness (sometimes even tears, just to see how happy they r as they deserve)!!! And I hope I can finish them all asap and this can keep updating!!!!!! <333333 Love uuuu three thousand more!!!!!!!!!!
ohh no need to worry!! i read every comment i receive, no matter how long! honestly speaking, i love the long comments A L O T and idk if its bc it feels like a mini book review or smthg, which i do love LOL its such a funky little vibe, but i always appreciate these kinds of comments. ill be sure to respond in kind to your lovely comment, tho idk if ill be able to respond with the same amount of depth and lengthkfdjsfsfds i hope youll be okay with that (っ˘ω˘ς )
i find it rlly cool that you take notes as you read!! it really REALLY feels like a book-review-assignment kind of thing and i rlly RLLY love that LMAOOO and im so glad that you enjoy my writinggg ik for a fact that a lot of little mistakes and booboos still remain after my edits, but seeing that MOST of it still stands up pretty well genuinely makes me super relieved
i think i mentioned somewhere before that i love being able to make it seem like youre able to rlly take the mc's place and experience the world im trying to bring you all into, and if you think im doing that well, nothing could make me happierrrkefjndfdfg its truly my pleasure to be able to give anyone and everyone a story that they c o u l d feel rlly involved with, and im happy that its been so fun for you!! i shall endeavor to do my best and continue the hard work in the future (whenever that might be), i promise!! ☆ ～('▽^人)
i see youre a big obi fan so far LOL im glad that i could capture obi wan so well for you because ik obi can be,,,, Very Hard to get down right for so many reasons and in such different ways than it is to write anakin. the other characters have their own little ticks that make them hard to pin down beyond our two main boys too, and im glad that ive done them enough justice for them to stand out to you as at least "passable" ｡ﾟ(TヮT)ﾟ｡
i rlly DO say smthg like "im glad..." too much dont i LMAO but it rlly IS the truth,,, thank you so very much for the kind, OH-SO VERY KIND, comment (b ᵔ▽ᵔ)b i look forward to your next comment, should you choose to make another one, and i hope that you continute to enjoy the fic as you so far haveeee i would like to think that story things and my writing gets better the closer you get to the more recent chaps, and i rlly am proud of them hehe i definitely wont let myself let go of this fic until its done, tho it may take some time to relax myself back into it, so i hope youll ride along with the journey to the end (๑˃ᴗ˂)ﻭ
thank you again for the comment, the love, and the dedication youve shown this fic!! ☆⌒ヽ(*'､^*)chu
It’s fun with me no matter how many words ill get from u awwww as long as I can receive ur comments! It already makes me so happyyyyy… I wait it for every day honestly 🥹🥹🥹 and when I see the notification I jump and shout out LMAO. I was just so looking forward to ur reply. I don’t know why ;) maybe it’s bc I really want to talk to the author I love 💕 !!! Yah I’ve noticed little mistakes abt mc’s gender and some of ur newly edits (I will carefully read every summary and edits for each chap lol I don’t want to let go any of the detail and ur feelings when creating this story!!!) Also I even take some of the gender mistakes down in my notes maybe later I will try to find a way to let u know and u can correct them maybe <3 But I rly don’t think that’s a big deal~~ I assure u that they r all stand pretty well!!!
For why I fav Obi so much is bcs before MC encounter Anakin, mc share their childhood and apprentice years (which are lonely and tough) with Obi as their only comfort and light and I just fall for him totally… I just love their interaction no matter what that is. Anything couldn’t gone wrong with him by their side. 🥹 Actually I love two boys (obi and ani) equally that’s why I get so excited when I’m gonna meet Anakin and thus can’t help myself leaving this comment lollll! They r not just “passable” for me but they r all too real in this story I love them and uuuuuuu!!!
I’ve actually already leave other more comments (bcs yah when Anakin comes around and the plot gets more intensive I just can’t stand not to write down my feelings) under chaps that I recently read u can check em out!!! <333333 And— why I read ur fic in a relatively slow pace is bcs I want to enjoy your language as much as enjoying the story itself. In fact English is not my mother language so yah I need a bit more time and effort to go through the whole story. BCS I’m not just trying to understand what those words basically mean but TO TRULY FEEL the beauty your language can create for me, it will definitely take more time than usual for me to read this since I don’t use translator to roughly translate them all but to ponder each word myself. I just enjoy doing this so much. <3 I’ll ride along the journey to the end and appreciate every chap I promise, especially ur newly-published ones u can be proud of but I must say former chaps r all greattttt!!!! It’s so good to know that u won’t leave this fic and I hope u can rest well before come back!!!!!! And that receiving ur messages is like I’m not alone during this journey bcs knowing u r always around and will comment back. I feel more strength and passion to do it with u together. <33333
And I wonder— if I will draw something for this story how can I make u see ‘em? Maybe through Twi / Ins / Tumb? <3
I don’t want to bother u with a lot of words but awwwww I just get more excited with ur such warm-hearted and careful response… I’m afraid I’m gonna leave a lot more comments and much longer length for each than expected… 😭😭😭💕💕💕🥰🥰🥰
kskhdflnlsndfjsdgf iM SORRY FOR THE LATE RESPONSE,,, especially now that i know youre just waiting for themdkfjsfsfdf i, unfortunately, dont have the time to respond to long comments very often, so they kinda just collect until i DO have the time sdfsdnfsfsf but to know that youre excitedly waiting for a comment from me makes me feel very waited for, and i hope that i didnt keep you waiting for too long hehe
ahhh those mistakes huh,,,, my eye for reading and edits has been painfully tested, especially after several years of school LOL theres a place in my discord where ppl usually shake me down for stuff like that, but other than that, there arent rlly any other places to show me what might be off dfbskjfsfsdf
obi DOES get quite the leg up when it comes to the whole "love rival thing that isnt even a competition in the first place, really" thing Huh,,,, even so, ani is still KINDA pulling ahead of obi bc hes just got no shame when it comes to showing his appreciation and love for mc LMAO obi, you need to step up your game (o˘◡˘o)
oooh english may not be your first language, but you certainly type pretty well!! and to see that you read with such a fine eye,,, thats even more effort than what i do sometimes (though, that might be because my body rejects reading these days LOL) your dedication to not only take your time to read, but to translate it yourself is incredible!!! i honestly have no idea if my brain was big enough to put things into the story that wouldnt show up well through any translations, but i wouldnt put it past me LOL i commend your effort, and im super grateful for it!! i hope my writing isnt too hard to understand tho,,, (￣▽￣*)ゞ i know that i go a little crazy sometimes,,,,,
again, thank you so much for the dedication, the love, and the support youve shown for me and daybreak so far!! i rlly appreciate all the kind words youve given me hehe and as for art, i would love to see art!! you can @ me on tumblr or submit it directly to me— whatever youd like to do, so long as its on tumblr, since its a bit easier there (its https://sshiro-kkuro.tumblr.com/) and as for any future long LONG comments, feel free to send them!! i may take a while to get back to them, but i definitely WILL get back to them!! ヽ(*°▽°*)ﾉ
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