Comment on Azurween: Worthy of a trick or treat?

  1. DarkBright_Cipher on Chapter 1 Mon 17 Oct 2022 12:50AM UTC

    I appreciate you sharing the story idea. When I saw your comment I was pleasently blown away by your feedback and engagement. While I mostly see Queen Elizabeth seeing Belfast and Enterprise being together as a strong political move that would further unite the two countries/factions, her sabotaging their relationship would be a possibility. Sadly, I'm not of fan of those characters thinking—"I see that you're very happy, but you two are from two different worlds, so I'm going to break you up, and I expect you to still be happy."

    If the queen's goal would be to have Belfast be happy with someone of the Royal Navy then she's going to selfishly break her down before she finds that "true" happiness again. Bad Elizabeth, don't cause more unnecessary sadness in the world.

    However, if the queen is causing trickery that fools Belfast in thinking it's Enterprise's doing, it would have to have a lot of plot convenience to make that happen. I hate saying that as a story can have a lot of convenient moments and still work. However, I truly believe that Belfast would at least confront Enterprise before leaving with Edinburgh and at least hear a bit that would seed doubt in Enterprise's involvement relating to Edinburgh getting hurt. She could still storm off in the end though.

    Funny enough, I could see it the opposite, where the queen is trying her hardest to make Belfast become angry with Enterprise yet Belfast brushes it aside, showing that their love runs deep.

    This is a very nice idea, but I'm not completely on board with it. I have a few ideas I have working at the moment and I'm trying to get those done above all else.
    I'll look back into this idea later down the road and see if I can use certain ideas.

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    1. Mats (Guest) on Chapter 1 Mon 17 Oct 2022 08:46PM UTC

      Thank you for at least reading it and I do understand your point about Queen Elizabeth. to be honest I just used her for her authority in the Royal Navy. but maybe it's best if you eventually decide if You want to write a story then maybe it's best to come up with an original character. somebody clever enough to make everything happen and having the right authority to cover it up. I think that would make the story flow a bit better.

      but anyway this was just a suggestion you don't have to write it if you don't want to. I just really needed to get it off my chest. so thanks for at least reading it.

      and to be honest I am now curious to see what other ideas you have in the Works. I can't wait to see we're your going to take your next stories.

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      1. DarkBright_Cipher on Chapter 1 Tue 18 Oct 2022 05:48PM UTC

        I understand. I have stories that I never got the chance to write that I want to show but sometimes they are mostly concepts that need to be more thought out before I feel confident in diving into a full length story.

        Thanks for the support.

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        1. Mats (Guest) on Chapter 1 Tue 18 Oct 2022 06:06PM UTC

          You're welcome and thanks for reading my story suggestions. and I can't wait to see what you come up with next and if you want a random idea for a story I'm always open to help.

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