Okay, so here goes.. I'm not even going to come close to getting it all out that I want to say about this fic. You seem to be IN MY MIND when it comes to the relationships and personalities of these two men. You portray them exactly how I want them to be portrayed in every sick fantasy I've ever had. Thor is dom, strong, kind of a jerk at times, but deep down, sweet, romantic, charming and caring. Loki is insecure, troubled, but is so smitten with Thor, and rightly so. I so desperately wanted them to fall in love not even half way through this entire work. When you posted notes at the end of chapter 8 (I think) about a possible threesome I was SO upset. I'm so glad you didn't go that route. Thor and Loki needed to be together alone, and Jane out of the picture. The relationship between her and Thor is believable. They've gotten to a point in their relationship where they care and love eachother but not in love anymore. My drawbacks to this fic are few, but I think a male love interest at some point throughout Thor's life would have been good, since he's portrayed as a such a ladies man all through highschool, college, etc. I think maybe he should be younger in the fic, maybe 26-27 instead of 30. They could have married right out of highschool and since he took over dad's business he could technically be younger. I personally don't have an issue with 30 years old anything, as it's very young in the big picture of life but in this particular one, I'd see him a little younger. Oh, and I'm NOT a fan of underage BUT for some reason, I read this fic despite the warnings of Underage and so glad I did. It worked for me because Loki was so mature and smart, even if troubled, and Thor was VERY disturbed by it when he found out, (good call), instead of just continuing. It's believable that he can wait four more months for Loki now just as he waited to have Jane til they got married. I would love to read a continuation of this years down the road, - Loki's gotten his H.S. diploma, maybe online, then went to college. I see him doing something with child care development because he either A. Finds out he's great with kids after helping raise Thor's and Jane's daughter? or B. Because he had a troubled childhood, he wants to help other kids in bad situations. I also see a scenario, (and many have issue with this but I dont'), where Jane looses the baby maybe a month or two into pregnancy, making their divorce a cleaner cut one and she leaves them to have their life together. Loki wants to marry Thor but Thor won't until Loki finishes college. Never lose the "daddy" fetish, that's gotta stay forever! Loki becomes a strong, successful young professional but when he's alone with Thor, he melts into that little daddy toy again. Thor continues to be romantic and surprise him constantly with trips, gifts and affection. I want them to have a dog! lol Maybe they move to the suburbs? Maybe they still like public sex, (I'm picturing a neighbor's bar-b-q party or they go to a wedding of a friend and fuck in the fancy bathroom at the reception, OR CHURCH!! Omg.. yes.. church. I'm just a train of thought here. If you'd give me the go ahead, I'd love to write a continuation of this. I think we have similar writing styles. I don't have anything on AO3 now to show you but I rp a lot and I can't believe I've never done the sugar daddy scenario. Daddy kink I've done but it was a sex slave rp. I'd love to discuss more with you !!!
MY GOSH. I was half terrified this was a huge complaint, glad to see it isn't XD Sorry for taking so long to answer, haven't had free time in days. Your enthusiasm for this pile of filth is very flattering, I am glad to have shared head space!
You're right, I should've hinted at a male love interest. Sadly I flew through writing this series, I wouldn't be surprised if there are holes large enough to lose an elephant in. Same with the age, but I'm glad one of us is thinking! I might've been thinking entirely with my lady boner. Yup, probably.
I think my days of writing underage stuff ended with this. Looking back, I'm glad Loki turned out to be as mature as he was. The kink is looking creepier with each year I age LOL.
To be honest with you I am not in the Thorki headspace right now, and far from this series. I won't say no to you writing a continuation, but I'd prefer it to be an unofficial version as I doubt my ability to find my way back into the state I was when I wrote this and stay true to that mindset when giving my opinion for their future. But I have no problem with you writing what YOU think would happen afterwards, I'd rather love to read it, you definitely seem to be in sync with the atmosphere of this series! You can hit me up on tumblr to discuss it and tell me your ideas, its always fantastic to meet a like-minded person!!
I'm super flattered to hear your thoughts, thank you so much for the enthusiasm and support!!!
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