The new version is much better, but this might be just me nitpicking:
The fight between Bucky and Mark doesn’t feel like two enhanced beings, it should at least look like T-800 vs T-1000 in their first fight. They should’ve easily smash into the environment, just the amount of force they punch could shatters concrete. I laughed when I saw the brick. A brick would shatter under 180 Newton of force, that’s about 180 KG. Captain America could easily lift 1500 pounds (the motorcycle with the 3 fat ladies in his touring days), his strength is probably roughly maximum at 4-6 tons in the MCU. The 616 version can only bench around 800 pounds, that’s because comic writers know jack about weight lifting. Since Captain America and Bucky have the same equivalent powers, Bucky could lift the same. A brick will shatter if they hit Captain America or Bucky’s head, it might daze them for a moment, but no, no way that a brick plus Mark’s hand would cause the recalibration. Mark hitting his head in succession for several time will definitely cause the disruption. Even Marv from Home Alone survived bricks to the head with no lasting damage, Bucky is a Super soldier.
Why did you make Mark feel searing pain when he was hit by bullets? This is just unrealistic. Remember that sequence in Nolan’s house with the stealth soldiers, they were blasting Nolan with machine gun fire and he was utterly unfazed. Nolan survived an explosion (via Donald’s self-destruct button) and later a Satellite ion cannon’s death beam twice in succession, and he inky got a nose bleed. Nolan also used Mark’s head in that subway, despite the train hitting them in full speed, Mark with undamaged.
You can hold back your strength, your speed, even your own reaction time you move faster enough. But you can’t hold back your own durability. If somebody stumbles into Superman, it will feel like hitting a wall instead of a person. Bullets will bounce off Mark, just like grenades or explosion. It could damage his clothing, creating some hilarious moments (unless he is wearing a suit). If Bucky hit him with those heavy anti-vehicle Anti-material rifle, maybe he could feel pain. but searing pain from Bucky’s assault rifle, yeah right.
All very valid points. I will need to go over the fight again, this is excellent feedback though, you’re really helping me improve the story. The things you mentioned in hindsight seem so obvious yet my mind simply overlooked these things. So once again thank you.
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ShadowDragonX on Chapter 19 Sat 30 Nov 2024 01:27AM UTC
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