Oh, this is a very promising first chapter! I love the atmosphere and setting at sea, as well as the unknown presence that keeps lurking around the ship and Jayce's mind. It's really well done.
Also, captain Vander! I didn't think it would fit him so well, but now I can totally see it.
What I also didn't expect was a disguised siren!Silco in broad daylight, just strolling around with an unnerving presence. Very observant of Jayce to question "Stevens" and his story of shipwreck. I guess a siren's charmes can't trap everyone?
ALSO
-“Some more than others,” he replied with a smile. “Though not entirely untamable with enough time and patience.”-
Excuse me??? Not entirely untamable?? What are you suggesting here, Vander. Is that a tamned siren just chilling on your ship?? What does that even mean, I have so many questions, haha.
I'm really looking forward to read more. It's a very interesting setting.
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gummimachete on Chapter 1 Tue 01 Apr 2025 06:49PM UTC
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