This was just so COOL, like being transported into Godzilla's mind and body! You approached the inhuman POV with amazing skill. His thoughts unfolded in a manner somewhere between human and animal: reactive, but with some understanding of his place in the world. Your prose is so evocative and visceral, I felt every texture, sound, and scent.
They would not get in his way today, the collective gazes emanated fear and respect, the only proper greeting for a king such as himself.
In a very animal way, he KNOWS his place in the world. He has no misgivings or doubts. But he is more than just "animal," as he has the ability to read and interpret human emotions as well.
The sound — a simple roar to human ears — swarmed under his skin, coiling around his ribcage point by point, and pat-pat-patted against the muscles of his heart.
You utilize this type of onomatopoetic writing to great effect - not only does it give me a sense of what Godzilla is sensing, but also HOW he is sensing it. The way he interprets his world differently than a human might.
He would die, but the earth could not have him.
The ending has such a tragic feel based on how you drew me into Godzilla's inner world. I now see him as a complete entity rather than just a "monster." It takes great skill to create nuance in the monstrous, and you've done a fabulous job here. I can feel your love and compassion for the character. Thank you for your work!
It feels so strange to write Godzilla, to be honest, for precisely the reasons you mentioned. He's so reactive, so it comes really naturally for me in terms of an inhuman body (I love describing senses and worked on xenofiction for a while) but it also means having a human defined sense of certain concepts feels wrong, but not non-existent, so I had to describe them differently. Like you described, he DOES have a sense for the world, but it literally cannot match what humans feel cause, in the simplest way to describe, he's not human. (Sunspots under his skin was one of my favorite ways to describe his body heating up).
The onomatapia sentence was one of my favorite lines, the type where you sit back and go "this one line is perfect". The concept of feeling sound fits him so well in his reptilian body, and hopefully made it more clear that even with sounds that all sound the same to humans, kaiju can decipher different things from each roar or sound!
Thank you so much, I really love creatures like Godzilla, and I'm so glad I managed to turn him into a full character, scales and all!
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