Comment on Rito's corrupted harem (Cancelled)

  1. Vox_Premium on Chapter 7 Sun 04 May 2025 04:42PM UTC

    Trust us.....

    Which one? because annon is pretty easy, he is on patreon the other images are from imhentai.xxx

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    1. Hidden-eye (Guest) on Chapter 7 Mon 05 May 2025 07:03AM UTC

      from Annom

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      1. Vox_Premium on Chapter 7 Mon 05 May 2025 07:35AM UTC

        Trust us.....

        https://imhentai.xxx/artist/annon/

        There you go

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        1. Hidden-eye (Guest) on Chapter 7 Mon 05 May 2025 09:25AM UTC

          have a few things to say:

          1. Since the story is based on the other one inspired by Annon's images, their mentality will also change to that of a bimbo. Something like, will Mikan become a slut addicted to sucking her brother's dick and drinking his cum?

          2. Most people forget this, but there's a baby in the house, Celine dies there too, they have to be careful when having sex.

          3. What will it be like when all the girls in the house surrender to him?

          4. One criticism, improve the length of the sex scenes, the longer and more detailed they are, the more readers you'll attract. Make the girls discover their fetishes.

          5. How many chapters will there be? I want at least 1

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          1. Vox_Premium on Chapter 7 Mon 05 May 2025 09:41AM UTC

            Trust us.....

            I'm currently working on a remake that will be better this time. I focused too much on quantity over quality with this one, and that was a mistake. It will basically be the same but better written and more detailed. Well, I'll try. Writing is harder than you think, especially the sex scenes.

            But yes thanks for the Tips they are really helpful.

            And A friend of mine had an idea about Celine: what if she had a growth spurt when she accidentally drank the pink serum?

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            1. Hidden-eye (Guest) on Chapter 7 Mon 05 May 2025 09:54AM UTC

              Ok, I get it! Ha, I wanted to write that I wanted at least 80 chapters!

              And this part about Celine worries me a little, she's like Rito's daughter.

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              1. Vox_Premium on Chapter 7 Mon 05 May 2025 09:57AM UTC

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                Hm true. Ok let's forget that.

                80 Chapters?! holy hell i don't think i can write that many im not Nobodyinparticular

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                1. Hidden-eye (Guest) on Chapter 7 Mon 05 May 2025 10:00AM UTC

                  I see a future in you, I strongly believe that you can bring great stories to To Love Ru, the more you write the more you will improve, but I understand, make as many chapters as you want, just don't make too few.

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                  1. Vox_Premium on Chapter 7 Mon 05 May 2025 10:06AM UTC

                    Trust us.....

                    Thank you i try my best

                    Btw do youbknow Rosario+vampire and shinmai maou no testament?

                    I thought about a Crossover harem story. Basara is the Protagonist of course.

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