You have some really tightly written dialogue here! Gonzo’s “…you” followed by Niko’s “What he said!” And Linebeck’s line: “/We’re/ eating your jerky.”
Linebeck’s lines in general are really top-tier. He’s sometimes tricky to write: in game, we get the sense that he actually has a decently wide vocabulary, but he’s also prone to some sailor-isms with lines like, as you included, “Yeesh” and calling Link “kid” more than his own name.
The detail about his wound having healed some was also interesting. I like that there’s so much unanswered here. Why was it healed? How much time really has passed? Where is Linebeck from? I think the lack of real explanation is paramount to the quality of this story because, in a media culture so plagued by literalism and explanation, you allow the reader to use their imagination.
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