YESSSSS HI HELLO FELT LIKE AN ETERNITY 😭😭😭😭😭 IM DELIGHTED WITH THE UPDATE YAYYYYYY Yeahhhhh that writer's block strikes when you least expect or want it 😭😭 You canNOT honestly think this is your weakest chapter or some shit mannn I was TENSE I was on TIPTOES on the EDGE OF MY SEAT (I really do nOT have a clue how we were doing in that test so it's all shocking to me) I was SCREAMING because of the TENSION OMG THE TENSION (you might have gathered from my observations that I LOVED IT I ADORED IT) although I am biased I love reading like live commentary (the added sexual drama is a bonus and poetic prose is a great bonus) Live reactions INCOMING (you're too good authorji) (that's why I have to include all the specific lines that make me feral) "People called Virat a diamond: mined under pressure. And the Scorpio within him craved it. The higher the stakes, the brighter he’d burn." If ever I wanted to find a better phrase to sum up Kohli i would NOT find it "Feeling the heat, his muscles tensed, and his patience snapped like an overstrung bow as Hazlewood’s shadow crossed the crease. The ball left his hand with an audible hiss, like a tracer bullet, seams upright and flashing like knife edges in the sun." Just appreciation of great evocative writing truly it would be so easy to write this scene bland but just the way you describe it I adoreee it Poor Hoff caught between the boys' drama 😭😭😭 they're just eye fucking each other across the ground and he's like "boys we have a job to do PLEASE" Cummins sulking cause "he doesn't CARE" meanwhile Kohli : is he looking is he looking did he look did he REACT did he SCOWL why isn't he BOWLING TO ME "Across the pitch, Cummins’ lips flickered. Not a smile, but a hunter laying intricate traps for his next possession." Yup here's the line where I screamed idk 😂 it's just. OKAYYYYYYY VIRATTT Just the tension omggggggg the acknowledgement of loss and wins and ughhhhhh YESSSS VIRAT CAN TELL THAT HE DRIVES PATTY CRAZY HE HAS NOTICED And the scene where he scores his fifty AH I am not eloquent today (if I ever am) idek ITS SO COOL JUST ONE BAD BALL AND ITS FROM PAT AND THATS THE ONE HE USES TO GET TO HIS FIFTY "The blue eyed storm" description valid and appreciated “Never mentioned you couldn’t get to fifty.” He shot Virat a quick look; flame meeting flood in a silent detonation. The shadows began to lengthen across the pitch after tea, turning Cummins’ ocean eyes as black as deep water. “Plenty of time to rectify that.” no words I am feral I am shaking I AM. SHAKING "Two predators circling, each certain the other’s throat was already in his teeth." YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS Oh god I don't think I can wait for chapter 8 😭😭😭😭😭 this is a PROBLEM I NEED IT also to answer your question Id rather Virat care FOR pat and pat care for him and then being sickeningly in love :D THIS. WAS. AMAZING. YOU ARE A MARVEL. ILYY CANT WAITTTT ❣️❣️❣️❣️❣️
- sjhdkjf i don't remember much of the test itself too but thankfully there is also a youtube link somewhere of virat's inning ball-by-ball so i did watch that a couple of times too to get some details right #dedication - sexual drama?!!??! PLEASE I FELT LIKE THAT WAS MISSING FROM THIS CHAPTER AHHHHH - (side note i love how u always call me authorji jdkhfkjh itni respect hazam nahi hoti) - see virat really is a diamond you know that one hindi saying jahan jahan matter bade hote hai etcetc that's him - AHH THANK YOU YEAH i was breaking my head over that so much bc i was like if i just directly write like how cricinfo describes each delivery that's so boring. so i got some inspiration from shastri sir a la tracer bullet line HAHAH - not to be completely biased bc i am a huge hoff lover (duh) but im really painting him out to be the most important side character aren't i 😭 - they both think the other doesn't give a fuck and that's somehow my favourite thing to keep dragging out HAHA - virat bhai putting his contact lenses to good use ofc it's to study the faces of his opponent. just the one. - fun fact though in reality too that was how that ball was described they said it was the first ball that cummins hadn't executed perfectly and then BOOM! - I LOVED WRITING THAT BIT SO MUCH THOUGH i always knew when i got to this scene i wanted cummins to say sth along the lines of "i said u wont score a 100 so you getting a 50 doesnt mean shit" or sth like that dfjkhgjkdhg - i do have to give you some credit too though because the excerpt of your writing you shared with me really made me consciously try and reinforce the hunter/predator/animal imagery while describing their dynamics too i'm trying to come up with as many ways as possible hehe - and chapter 8 is here IT'S HERE HAHA DON'T KNOW IF YOU'VE READ YET BUT I DID KINDA DROP IN A LINE ABOUT CARING SEE IF U CAN SPOT IT 🙂↕️
ONCE AGAIN I LOVE YOU I APPRECIATE YOU SO MUCH THANK YOU FOR FUELING MY DELUSIONS LIKE THIS <3
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